New Script

The advice I have gotten has been to focus on the motivation that moves my story and tying all the elements together.  I had purposely cut a lot of elements out.  to keep the script short.  Now I will but in some of the backstory and really try to make everything work together.  Mike Cushny also recommended I watch a great movie called " The Eternal Sunshine of a spotless Mind"  A totally different type of film, from what I want to do, but very unconventional and freeing.  It was refreshing and helpful. The final script I will start with is now posted.  It is long, because I broke each scene up for shooting purposes and camera work.